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Offline kaska Reading Song of Jikhoshi by Katie W Stewart
20 Jul 2012, 03:01 PM | Post: #11

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RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb

Good point Tresa, I was referring to Dark Tidings.
Offline Ken Magee Reading Leaving Berlin by Joseph Kanon
20 Jul 2012, 04:30 PM | Post: #12

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RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb

(20 Jul 2012 12:19 PM)kaska Wrote:  I think we need to keep the "escape torture & certain death" as that's the reason behind the time travel & relevant to the story.
(20 Jul 2012 01:37 PM)TresaC Wrote:  Is it relevant to this book or the previous one? Over to you Ken.

I thought it added a bit of drama, but I fully accept that it's not particularly relevant to the sequel... the fact that they time-travelled using magic is the important thing.

It's so important to get other's views... I'll keep thinking about it.
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RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb

Hi, Ken.

Here's my take on this - I'm not very good at blurbs - using bits of everyone else's suggestions.

Ancient magic has infected the Internet and the planet can't handle it.

When Tung, a young thief, and Madrick, a disgraced wizard, used a time-travel spell to reach the present day, they brought powerful magic with them.

Now they are in big trouble.

The two misfits, along with Michael, a computer hacker, are the only people who can save the Earth from the ensuing catastrophe. With evil wizards in pursuit, and bent on destroying not only Tung and Madrick but our modern way of life, saving the world just got a whole lot harder.
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RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb

Hi Ken
Anyone who read your first book will know what to expect from the sequel, but if you are thinking that readers can read the second without reading the first, then your blurb needs to capture the essence of the book.
There is nothing at all in your proposed blurb that suggests that the new book is FUNNY - and what made Dark Tidings so enjoyable for me were the many moments of humour, sometimes riotously slapstick, and sometimes more subtle. Assuming that the new book is in the same style I think the blurb should say so.

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Offline Ken Magee Reading Leaving Berlin by Joseph Kanon
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RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb

(20 Jul 2012 08:11 PM)B J Burton Wrote:  Hi Ken
Anyone who read your first book will know what to expect from the sequel, but if you are thinking that readers can read the second without reading the first, then your blurb needs to capture the essence of the book.
There is nothing at all in your proposed blurb that suggests that the new book is FUNNY - and what made Dark Tidings so enjoyable for me were the many moments of humour, sometimes riotously slapstick, and sometimes more subtle. Assuming that the new book is in the same style I think the blurb should say so.

Barry

Thanks for that Barry, very kind. I don't want to just say 'it's funny' - anyone any ideas?
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RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb

'A humorous journey through time and the Internet' Just an idea.
Offline Ken Magee Reading Leaving Berlin by Joseph Kanon
28 Jul 2012, 09:37 AM | Post: #17

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Question Dark Tidings sequel blurb NEW VERSION - please help

This post was last modified: 28 Jul 2012 07:23 PM by Ken Magee.
Thanks again for all the pointers, here's where they led me...

Quote: Ancient magic has infected the Internet and it’s going to destroy civilisation as we know it.

Previously - Ancient magic has transported Tung, a young thief, and Madrick, a has-been wizard, across a millennium. The powerful magic they brought with them was unwittingly spread over the Internet by Michael, a hacker whose good intentions far outstripped his common sense.

Problem - Civilisation simply can’t handle the unforeseen consequences of the magic and the only people who can prevent the ensuing catastrophe are the same three who created the mess in the first place.

Now - To make matters even worse, evil wizards have followed Tung and Madrick through time. They’re determined to hunt down and destroy the pair, and with them, our modern way of life. Saving the world has just got a whole lot harder.

The blurb still doesn't capture the humour, but maybe Tresa's suggestion 'A humorous journey through time and the Internet' on the cover under the title might be the answer.

As always, your thoughts would be greatly appreciated.
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Dark Tidings sequel blurb NEW VERSION - please help

This post was last modified: 28 Jul 2012 07:27 PM by Ken Magee.
I should have changed Subject header in the previous post to make it obvious that I had a new version of the blurb.

NEW EDIT - Which I can now see doesn't travel to the Forum Post - it still uses the original Subject header... ah well. Huh
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RE: Dark Tidings sequel blurb NEW VERSION - please help

(28 Jul 2012 09:37 AM)Ken Magee Wrote:  Thanks again for all the pointers, here's where they led me...

Quote: Ancient magic has infected the Internet and it’s going to destroy civilisation as we know it.

Previously - Ancient magic has transported Tung, a young thief, and Madrick, a has-been wizard, across a millennium. The powerful magic they brought with them was unwittingly spread over the Internet by Michael, a hacker whose good intentions far outstripped his common sense.

Problem - Civilisation simply can’t handle the unforeseen consequences of the magic and the only people who can prevent the ensuing catastrophe are the same three who created the mess in the first place.

Now - To make matters even worse, evil wizards have followed Tung and Madrick through time. They’re determined to hunt down and destroy the pair, and with them, our modern way of life. Saving the world has just got a whole lot harder.

The blurb still doesn't capture the humour, but maybe Tresa's suggestion 'A humorous journey through time and the Internet' on the cover under the title might be the answer.

As always, your thoughts would be greatly appreciated.

Ken - why not add Tresa suggestion at the end? Viz:
Saving the world just got a whole harder in this humorous journey through time and the Internet.

Would that work for you?
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RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb

Hi Ken,
Sorry for the delay in replying. Things happening!

I like the changes you have made. I agree, if you want it known it is a humorous book, add the bit on at the end as Lynda suggests.

Hope you are please with your results.
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