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Offline Dorte Hummelshoj Reading Blood Harvest by S.J. Bolton
15 Dec 2016, 02:38 PM | Post: #1

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Blurb help, please

This post was last modified: 15 Dec 2016 02:40 PM by Dorte Hummelshoj.
I'm on the verge of publishing the next Tora Skammelsen novella, and it's that awful time ... the dreaded blurb  Shocked
Advice will be much appreciated!

Miller's Cottage
Volume four in the Tora Skammelsen crime series (a novella of c 100 pages) 
Tora buys her own home near the North Sea, but village life does not quite live up to her expectations. Soon she develops a keen interest in the undertakings of her peculiar neighbour Margrethe, however. Why does the widow try to hide the fact that a man is living with her? Besides there is Rune, the charming sales rep at the Old Mill Inn, who all but sweeps Tora off her feet while her friend, Police Inspector Thomas Bilgren, is preoccupied with a bank robbery.
The story can be read as a stand-alone, but for readers with an interest in Tora's private affairs it may be a good idea to read the first volume, North Sea Cottage, first.
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15 Dec 2016, 03:43 PM | Post: #2

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RE: Blurb help, please

(15 Dec 2016 02:38 PM)Dorte Hummelshoj Wrote: Wrote:  I'm on the verge of publishing the next Tora Skammelsen novella, and it's that awful time ... the dreaded blurb  Shocked
Advice will be much appreciated!

Miller's Cottage
Volume four in the Tora Skammelsen crime series (a novella of c 100 pages) 
Tora buys her own home near the North Sea, but village life does not quite live up to her expectations. Soon she develops a keen interest in the undertakings of her peculiar neighbour Margrethe, however. Why does the widow try to hide the fact that a man is living with her? Besides there is Rune, the charming sales rep at the Old Mill Inn, who all but sweeps Tora off her feet while her friend, Police Inspector Thomas Bilgren, is preoccupied with a bank robbery.
The story can be read as a stand-alone, but for readers with an interest in Tora's private affairs it may be a good idea to read the first volume, North Sea Cottage, first.
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First - well done for being this close to publishing. I'm no good at writing blurbs either but I'll do my best to be picky with yours.

Tora buys a house (you don't need to point out that it is hers and the rest of the sentence seems fine and immediately interests me.) The word 'undertakings' doesn't sit quite right. I'd probably put 'activities'. I'd leave out 'however' or put it at the beginning of the sentence. 

Other than that, at first reading, I think it is likely to attract readers. I like it.
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Offline Dorte Hummelshoj Reading Blood Harvest by S.J. Bolton
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RE: Blurb help, please

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Thank you, Anna
- for your encouragement as well as for your sound advice!


First - well done for being this close to publishing. I'm no good at writing blurbs either but I'll do my best to be picky with yours.

Tora buys a house (you don't need to point out that it is hers and the rest of the sentence seems fine and immediately interests me.) The word 'undertakings' doesn't sit quite right. I'd probably put 'activities'. I'd leave out 'however' or put it at the beginning of the sentence. 

Other than that, at first reading, I think it is likely to attract readers. I like it.
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RE: Blurb help, please

You are very welcome, Dorte. Many Kuffers have helped me in the past. Blurbs are difficult, and I find I always feel pressed to produce one within a day or two.  I usually settle on one I feel happy with about a year or more after publication.
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RE: Blurb help, please

I don't know anyone who enjoys writing the wretched things, but I've found this blog post useful;

http://victoriamixon.com...
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Offline Dorte Hummelshoj Reading Blood Harvest by S.J. Bolton
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RE: Blurb help, please

(16 Dec 2016 09:39 AM)lyndawrites Wrote: Wrote:  I don't know anyone who enjoys writing the wretched things, but I've found this blog post useful;

http://victoriamixon.com...

Thank you, Lynda!
As you have seen, I have already published the novella (I really needed to get something out before Christmas).
But I'll take a look at the blog, and if she is able to make me wiser (which is not an easy project with my concentration), I'll change the blurb later.
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I had a go at a slight re-draft:

Miller's Cottage

Volume four in the Tora Skammelsen crime series

Tora buys a home by the sea, but village life does not live up to her expectations.

There are some things to keep life interesting though, like the puzzle as to why her widowed neighbour, Margrethe, is trying to hide the fact that a man is living with her.

Then there's Rune, the charming sales rep at the Old Mill Inn, who all but sweeps Tora off her feet while her friend, Police Inspector Thomas Bilgren, is preoccupied with a bank robbery.

The story can be read as a stand-alone, but for readers with an interest in Tora's private affairs it may be a good idea to read the first volume, North Sea Cottage, first.
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RE: Blurb help, please

Thank you for your suggestions!
I have published the story, but I will think about them.
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