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Offline SteeBee
27 Aug 2016, 03:55 PM | Post: #1

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An Ungentlemanly Act

This post was last modified: 27 Aug 2016 03:56 PM by SteeBee.
Well I've done it! It's taken me a long time but I am proud to announce the launch of my new book. 'An Ungentlemanly Act' introduces the reader to the dangerous world of Harry Flynn

War is the statesman's game, the priests delight, the lawyers jest & the assassins trade... 

1942. The Second World War was at its height & still going the way of the Axis powers. In neutral Spain that same war was being carried forward in a secret & deadly game of cat & mouse. British intelligence were helping downed allied airmen & escaped prisoners of war from across occupied Europe to evade the Nazis then return to Britain where they could rejoin their units & carry on the fight.

Determined to stop this, the Germans dispatched a special action unit of the Abwehr - the Nazis own intelligence service - to northern Spain with orders to destroy the escape pipeline & those operating it. 

The British soon found themselves under attack, their escape lines disrupted & personnel killed. It was vital that something be done to reverse the disaster which had overtaken the Spanish operation. It was soon realised that there was only one way out of this situation - to call on the services of Department Seven.......... 

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Offline SteeBee
28 Aug 2016, 07:37 PM | Post: #2

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RE: An Ungentlemanly Act

As some of you may already know I am new to this book publishing lark. In the two days since my book went live it has recorded twelve sales with the first being within the first hour! None of my friends & family are aware of my little secret so it's not them taking pity on me. However I did join several forums & established myself as a poster before asking permission to advertise the book. I also posted on various Facebook Kindle group pages.

I know many will hardly contain their laughter but I reckon that's not a half bad start to a first book from an unknown writer.
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28 Aug 2016, 09:54 PM | Post: #3

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RE: An Ungentlemanly Act

Hi Adam, congrats on launching your first book and on getting some early sales!

A little free advice for you. Your blurb on Amazon is very long and that may put readers off. I suggest scaling it down to around 100-150 words and keeping it as punchy as possible. Focus on the key points of the story and try to hook the reader in.
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28 Aug 2016, 10:33 PM | Post: #4

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RE: An Ungentlemanly Act

Well done, SteeBee! 12 sales is very good and I shall be over the moon if I achieve the same when mine is released this coming week. I also know about  keeping things secret - I did the same for years. The much loved family soon get over the laughter though, so don't worry.

And it's well worth listening to David's advice - he knows his stuff.
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Offline SteeBee
29 Aug 2016, 07:59 AM | Post: #5

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RE: An Ungentlemanly Act

Thanks Anna. Yes David I am aware of the length of the blurb (I actually pared it down!). What about using the opening part & shedding the rest? It would then read:

War is the statesman's game, the priests delight, the lawyers jest & the assassins trade...

1942. The Second World War was at its height & still going the way of the Axis powers. In neutral Spain that same war was being carried forward in a secret & deadly game of cat & mouse. British intelligence were helping downed allied airmen & escaped prisoners of war from across occupied Europe to evade the Nazis then return to Britain where they could rejoin their units & carry on the fight.

Determined to stop this, the Germans dispatched a special action unit of the Abwehr - the Nazis own intelligence service - to northern Spain with orders to destroy the escape pipeline & those operating it.

The British soon found themselves under attack, their escape lines disrupted & personnel killed. It was vital that something be done to reverse the disaster which had overtaken the Spanish operation. It was soon realised that there was only one way out of this situation - to call on the services of Department Seven..........


Otherwise I guess I could try to rework the whole thing.
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Offline SteeBee
29 Aug 2016, 08:05 AM | Post: #6

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RE: An Ungentlemanly Act

One point. I notice that members have their books shown under their posts. How do I do this? I have looked in the UCP but cannot find a way?
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29 Aug 2016, 09:44 AM | Post: #7

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RE: An Ungentlemanly Act

I think the opening few lines are good to set the scene, and some of the text about 1942 does get across a wartime flavour. But I would suggest making the blurb more focused on your main character and what his challenges are. Keep it as short as you can - it needs to be read in a matter of seconds. We all know that writing blurbs can be very difficult but it is worth persevering!

A couple of other suggestions. You use the ampersand symbol a lot instead of 'and'. This is not standard English so I think you should replace all of those with the proper word. Also, having your title in capital letters can be off-putting for some readers as it feels like shouting, so I'd say change that to title case: An Ungentlemanly Act.

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Offline SteeBee
30 Aug 2016, 07:57 AM | Post: #8

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This post was last modified: 30 Aug 2016 07:58 AM by SteeBee.
I just ported the introduction over from what I had written on forums. I'll have another go & post here for a critique.
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27 Sep 2016, 10:38 AM | Post: #9

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RE: An Ungentlemanly Act

An update. An Ungentlemanly Act made the amazon bestseller charts (free books) both in the UK & US at numbers 18 & 19 respectively. I'm guessing that this can be attributed in the main to interest shown by the Kindle Unlimited community as my amazon stats record that the pages read count run firmly into five figures.
As for sales they too continue to exceed my expectations. I have had only three days where no sales have been recorded & that has been more than made up for by 'bumper' days when multiple copies have been sold. It would appear that for every one sale I'm making in the UK I am getting two in the US.
The first of the reviews have also started to trickle in (these are from amazon US. I don't know these people!):

"Adam Chance is obviously a talented writer, as he has endowed the story with some interesting and believable characters.
Keeping the reader, eager to keep turning the pages. The detail of techniques used and the atmosphere of the war years are
Brilliantly captured. I for one can't wait to see what happens in the next Harry Flynn adventure."

"All the British Prime Minister wanted was men who were the best trained to counter attack the Nazis Intelligence Service. One of the best of his men turned out to be Harry Flyn, a criminal! He could out match anyone with every test they gave him. He was a thief, safe cracker, a fist fighter, and cut throat blood thirsty guy who could also pass as a Gentleman. This book was hard to put down as the author introduces his hero. A lot of action, well written, highly recommend!"

They have been kind enough to award the book five stars as have Goodreads.

I also had a few emails asking me about the next Harry Flynn adventure. the one below is typical:

"Is your next book with Amazon? Loved An Ungentlemanly Act, where can I get the next one?"

Obviously at some point I will encounter negative reviews but up to now the whole process has been well worth the effort.
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27 Sep 2016, 11:03 AM | Post: #10

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RE: An Ungentlemanly Act

You're off to a great start and well done! Clapping hands Get writing the next one!
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