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Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb - Ken Magee - 19 Jul 2012 07:02 PM

The Dark Tidings sequel is due for publication in August. I've drafted my first attempt at the blurb and I'd really appreciate your help and ideas.

Here's what I have so far...

Quote: Ancient magic has infected the Internet and the planet can’t handle it.

To escape torture and certain death, Tung, a young thief, and Madrick, a disgraced wizard, used an ancient spell to time-travel from a thousand years ago... bringing powerful magic with them. Michael, a computer hacker, spread the magic across the Internet. The only trouble is the planet simply cannot handle the unforeseen consequences.

Now, the global catastrophe is getting worse by the hour and these three are the only people on earth who can fix things.

To make matters even worse, evil wizards have followed Tung and Madrick through time, and they’re determined to hunt them down and destroy everything there is to cherish about modern life.

Lots of Kuffers helped me with the Dark Tidings blurb... I've got my fingers crossed that you'll all be generous with your time again.


RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb - joo - 19 Jul 2012 07:31 PM

I like your new tag line and the blurb is a good starting place.

It's going to be a good August with new releases by favourite authors.


RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb - alexroddie - 19 Jul 2012 07:38 PM

(19 Jul 2012 07:02 PM)Ken Magee Wrote:  
Quote: Ancient magic has infected the Internet and the planet can’t handle it.

To escape torture and certain death, Tung, a young thief, and Madrick, a disgraced wizard, used an ancient spell to time-travel from a thousand years ago... bringing powerful magic with them. Michael, a computer hacker, spread the magic across the Internet. The only trouble is the planet simply cannot handle the unforeseen consequences.

Now, the global catastrophe is getting worse by the hour and these three are the only people on earth who can fix things.

To make matters even worse, evil wizards have followed Tung and Madrick through time, and they’re determined to hunt them down and destroy everything there is to cherish about modern life.

Love the tagline! The actual blurb reads a little awkwardly in a couple of places, probably just grammar nitpicking but a blurb is so important it's probably worth getting 100%. Otherwise I think it's great and really hooks the potential reader.


RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb - TresaC - 19 Jul 2012 08:15 PM

Ooo Ken, I remember the fun we had last time with your blurb. I might have to join in again. I don't have time right now but may have a play tomorrow. Smile


RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb - kaska - 19 Jul 2012 09:51 PM

Very exciting!

Waited a long time for this Smile

Edit to add ... Tresa is very good with blurbs ... Look forward to her tweaking ...

Sounds good to me Smile


RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb - TresaC - 20 Jul 2012 10:45 AM

Aww, thanks Kaska. Smile

Ken, the first paragraph tells me about the first book. tell me more about this one! Can a reader pick up this book and read it without reading book 1?

PM me if you don't want to give away details of the book just yet.


RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb - TresaC - 20 Jul 2012 10:59 AM

Not sure I am completely happy with this but here is my first draft of your draft. Carry on tweaking, folks.

Ancient magic has infected the Internet and the planet can’t handle it.

Previously… Tung, a young thief, and Madrick, a disgraced wizard, used an ancient spell to travel to our time. Computer hacker, Michael, then spread their magic across the Internet.

Problem… The planet simply cannot handle the unforeseen consequences.

Now… As the ensuing global catastrophe unfolds these three are the only people on earth that can fix the problem.

Add to that the evil wizards following Tung and Madrick, that are bent on destroying all we cherish about modern life. An end to all we know or can the Internet learn to compute magic?


RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb - kaska - 20 Jul 2012 12:19 PM

I think we need to keep the "escape torture & certain death" as that's the reason behind the time travel & relevant to the story.

It's difficult for me because I've read the book & can see that everything Ken has put has meaning.

I like the way you've broken down the previously, problem & now Tresa. That works well Smile


RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb - Ken Magee - 20 Jul 2012 12:25 PM

Tresa, Thank you so much for the help with the blurb... it really helps to get an outside view of it. I know what you mean about the first paragraph... I felt it helped set the scene, but I'll think some more about it.

"Can a reader pick up this book and read it without reading book 1?" - I've tried to make it so a reader can start with the sequel. It has a few pages which cover the 'previously'... I hope I've done it in a way that doesn't spoil Dark Tidings should they choose to read it later and I hope it doesn't bore the folk who have already read the first book.

Again, thank you for your draft... plenty of ideas to mull over.


RE: Dark Tidings sequel - please help with the blurb - TresaC - 20 Jul 2012 01:37 PM

(20 Jul 2012 12:19 PM)kaska Wrote:  I think we need to keep the "escape torture & certain death" as that's the reason behind the time travel & relevant to the story.

It's difficult for me because I've read the book & can see that everything Ken has put has meaning.

I like the way you've broken down the previously, problem & now Tresa. That works well Smile

Is it relevant to this book or the previous one? Over to you Ken.

Ken, My first thought on reading your first paragraph was that it reminded me of the blurb from Dark Tidings. So if I was a returning reader I might mistakenly think that this is the the same thing. I understand you need to let the reader know it is a sequel and you sound as if you have done that in the book.

Have fun! Smile